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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 22, 2012 22:16:50 GMT -5
I set this thread up, really to just talk to you guys. to be more precise, I want to talk about how to improve eachothers writings skills and to also give eachother feedback on the characters we have roleplayed with. Knowing that we have already made dozens of RP stories with several characters in each one. I thought it might be a good idea to step back from that for a moment and just review all that has happened and see what we can improve to have a more efficient and more entertaining time to roleplay.
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Post by Danielle on Apr 23, 2012 9:21:10 GMT -5
I think that sounds like a great idea. Kudos to you for thinking of that. ^^
I know that, personally, if I have too many characters, I end up just.. One of them goes missing, pretty much. Or, I'll deliberately have them leave the area so that I won't have so many characters that I have to play for.
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 23, 2012 17:26:44 GMT -5
Alright then.
So lets start with feedback. Out of all the characters i have Roleplayed with witch ones have been the most enjoyable and compelling for you?
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Post by kirajadeforesyth on Apr 23, 2012 18:00:07 GMT -5
For me i have the same problem as Danilee. othe rthna that the ones I believe are the most compelling and enjoyable would be Dergma and Gwen.
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 23, 2012 18:05:43 GMT -5
(To Kira)
Really now. Granted though youve only seen a few of my characters actually do some action. But tell me, how do these two characters fascinate you the most compared to say, Mortem, or Zachariah? (just using these two as examples)
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Post by kirajadeforesyth on Apr 24, 2012 6:08:44 GMT -5
well.... I haven`t had enough time with Zach so I`m stil lgetting to know him but at the moment, I think I might like him and Mortem... I don`t know why, but he seems to be the person to be left alone and when he wants to cxome to you, he`ll come.. I also don`t know much about him yet but my first impression was that he doesn`t have much of a personality, sorry if I offended you, but that is how I felt. I`m stioll learning about the personality of Zach aS we go on, so I don`t know yet if I`ll like him or not. It seems that Dergma and Gwen have more personality, even when they are doingf the simplist things, and that is what I like but it stills has a mystery to it so you keep guessing about how they really think and feel. I really like that, I like it when a xcharacter has their own soul and personality and they flesh themselves out even in the most boring times when they`re sitting around, it still seems like they are twelling me something new or reinforcing something I thought about them. you understand this??
Also, I would love to hear what you think of my character as well, either you or Danielle. It`ll help me flesh them out even more in RP and get their images out of my head, which I`m still working on. Any comment or critizisms will help. However, I must warn you, my characters can take control themsleves, to me they are their own person buyt sometimes they respond to my feelings and thoughts. They have their own mind and soul to me. Just a warning for you guys.
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 24, 2012 14:01:50 GMT -5
I see, with mortem, the whole emotionless attitude is apropriate because of what he is, he is The Reaper, Nekromanus of the scythe, the representation of death, and just like death, he has little to no emotion, plus living for hundreds of years after fighting one Nekromanus war to decide the fate of the world can get a guy pretty mellow. never the less I see your point.
But what can you tell me about what you like about Dergma and Gwen, if youd already explained then please revise in more detail.
As for your characters, I'd like to say that I enjoy...Dante, The Fallen, and perhaps Pyre, though im still not sure because ive just started to understand some of what he is like.
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Post by Danielle on Apr 24, 2012 15:28:47 GMT -5
I like Freak, because although he's a jerk most of the time, he really does have a softer side to him. I actually wish I knew more about him.
I also like Mike. He's protective and strong, but he's also a kid sometimes. He always makes me laugh. I feel that he's one of your characters that had developed the most.
Also, John (from the future RP). He's strong and brave. He has a great back-story. He's a good father, and very kind. He's very good at putting up with Yui's meltdowns.
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 24, 2012 16:12:58 GMT -5
(to Dani)
With Freak, he's actually one of the most though-into characters I have. I was always planning to show a redeeming side to all the negative parts of his overall psychotically disturbed personality, but I still wish I could show off more of his wacky side, not when he's just scary or mean, but duringthose moments where he's just around to mess around ad screw with people.
As for Mike, he's actually suppose to be one of my secondary main characters, The original idea behind Mike's purpose in the story is to be the comedy relief, he is there to make the adventure enjoyable and bring out the goodside of he fellow companions whenther intentionally or not. I trully was able to acheive that by having him meet kumori and was more than satisfied by the results. So in a way, yeah, I was able to develop him much more than I thought. but dont forget, all the other demon pals he hangs around were pretty well thought out as well during the time with Kumori.
As for John I'm surprised you like him considering we havnt done that story in a while. but I agree that most of the stories ive made for my characters, i'm very proud of his. Although, I would like to continue more of that, I just cant think of anything else to continue the story ark before they find Nickson.
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Post by Danielle on Apr 24, 2012 16:23:19 GMT -5
Well, we could certainly have a situation to let out Freak's wacky side. After they get out of Hell and Delilah returns to normal, of course. ^^" I think I'd like to see that.
I agree, he is certainly the comic relief. But, he's not just silly all the time. He seems real. He changes, depending on the situation. He can be brave and strong, protecive, but he doesn't usually think things through. I think he's a great match for Kumori, because she needs someone to destract her from the not-so-positive thoughts that usually come into her head. And, I agree. It probably wouldn't be the same without everyone else.
I agree, I'm kind of running out of ideas on that one, too. But, he's still a great character. Maybe we can come up with something together. Like.. maybe something with Mina, because she's new?
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 24, 2012 16:31:18 GMT -5
Ok. now tell me, what are some of the characters you dislike the most, not just by how they behave, I'm asking what are some of the flaws are about them?
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Post by Danielle on Apr 24, 2012 17:05:44 GMT -5
Uhm... Well, you know you're a lazy speller, most of the time. We already discussed that. ^^"
I think.. Hmm... I'd actually need to think about that...
I'd like to get to know Cielio a little better. I don't know much about him. But, so far he seems like a good character.
I wanna know more about what the hell is going on with Dergma. He seems like a good evil guy, but yet loyal to Freak, but also ready to hurt him if he must. Interesting, but a bit confusing.
Sallas seems kinda heartless. I feel like he's using Anastasia, but I'm not sure. And, if he is, she doesn't realize it anyway. So.. it might be nice to clear that up a bit.
I feel like, most of the time, we're in your OCs area/relm-place. But.. most of my OCs don't have specific relms, so it's easier to fit in with other people's OCs/relms. Maybe we could try one of my OC relms and see how it works out? I have a new OC that would be perfect for that, if you want. ^^
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Post by kirajadeforesyth on Apr 24, 2012 23:21:46 GMT -5
yep... and YEAY!! ^^ what I like about Dergma and Gwen... well other than the fact I can just tell they are dripping with personality and a soul, I like that gwen seems like a thoughtful but sassy woman. She seems to care but be slow and hentle, yet forceful in good moderation and when she needs to be, she`ll take charge. least that`s what I`m getting so far. With dergma , i don`t knwo why, but he seems really cool to me. HJis ethics and belifs for what he`s fighting for shine though both his personality and how he react sto things. sure he might seem somewhat withdrawn but it seems to fit, as if he truley is the loyalest wrarrior in the universe. He seems to understand very cmplex thing snad make them so simple that even a mindless ant would understand wha trhe wnats and what he`s gonig to do. Actios fo the other seems to dictaate his reaction to specific things. He has an air of mystery and regalness yet seems to be the kind of guy that will sit strigh tyet put his feet up on a tabel, least that is wh t I`m getting so far. He truley beleives what he is doing is good and you can definetly see tha tin all of his actions and Dante truly does respect that. and what exactly do you like about Dante, The Fallen and Pyre (as of sor far)  |
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 25, 2012 1:22:08 GMT -5
(to Dani)
I guess at times I dont really care how I spell as long as I get my point across, but when the big words come along and if I dont remember, than I actually do make sure to spell check. True, I may fail to capitalize my beginning sentences or names, but I dont think I'm a lazy speller most of the time. But if my words arent matching my actions I'll be sure to focus harder on that.
As for cielio, youre correct, I seriously need to mold his backstory more and also show more of his personality.
If you want to know more about Dergma, which i'm surprised that he issuch an interest to the two of you girls, than try reading the RP Death angel and Wrath knight. but you will be seeing more of Dergma in the Freak RP soon anyway.
If you think Sallas is Heartless, then thats exactly what I wanted to hear. Sallas's true goal is power, His nekromanus is pretty much the manifestation of power, greed, pride, pretty much all the ingrediants to make a recipe of Deuce bag. Sallas is actually one of the first villians I'm trying to RP as, so if you dont like him, then that means i'm getting somewhere. However, I'm not so sure how to dcide his fate, whether to have him die, win the war and become the God he dreamed of being, or have him die but by Anastasia's hand.
Yeah, it has been like that for most of the RPs but some of it has been in neutral ground. However, it would be nice for someone else to just take the lead. So what did you have in mind?
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 25, 2012 2:02:10 GMT -5
(To Kira)
Hmm, both your statements are pretty accurate. Gwen is indeed sassy and fun, but tough and clever when she wants to be. as for Dergma, everything you sai about him is right on the money with the exception of the feet on the table comment. With Dergma, he was once, ironically, a Knight of holy church, so naturally, he is a very stern and proffesionally presentful character even before he was transformed by the flames of Hell. However, it is my duty as the writer to make sure to explain everything the best I can.
Dante is a serious badass, definitely a force to be reckoned with. However though, it is hard to fully understand what he is capable of because he seems to have so many different powers to keep track of. But I think the route of the problem is that, not to sound rude, but you seem to have a lot of typos in your wrighting. I advise that you always reread what you have written and see what mistakes you have and correct.
I like the whole idea behind the Fallen and the characters that represent it. I like how you take Real anggels from biblical myth and make them your own characters with their own personalities. right now I am very intrigued by Ryvel, simply because of the mystery around him and that fact that he seems to have more animal features than the other angels and valkeries.
With Pyre, so far, he seems like another badass that should not be triffled with. I also like how clever he seems and yet doesnt wish to to do what other demons do. But, he seems way too stubburn for his own good and seriously needs to stop looking a gift horse in the mouth when its given to him. never the less I look forward to seeing howhe develops even further.
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Post by Danielle on Apr 25, 2012 5:27:25 GMT -5
Well, that''s fine for spelling. I RP with a few people who don't know english very well, so I'm alright with it. But, I can help you, if you want.
I look forward to seeing more of Cielio and Dergma, and I'll read that one of I find time.
I think.. maybe she should, in the end, find out that he was just using her. And, then she would probably kill him because he made her love him and took her virginity when he didn't really love her at all. So, she would be pissed.
Okay~! So, I've started working on her in a story, but I'm also going to RP with her so I won't get writer's block. Her name is Princess Tani (short for something, I haven't decided yet), and she's 8. She's the princess of the green kingdom, which is being attacked by the red kingdom. Then, there's Aaron. He's a scholar, but he's the one who rescues Princess Tani and they escape. I'm not sure which kingdom they would go to, maybe blue? But, I think that's a pretty good background to have a character join as either friend or foe. ^^
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 25, 2012 12:39:44 GMT -5
(to Dani)
thankyou, but if I need to spell something I got google.
Hmmm, I was thinking about something like that too, but how would she be able to kill him?
Thats sounds like a good start. what would your suggestion be on what character I should use?
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Post by Danielle on Apr 25, 2012 14:32:54 GMT -5
Okay~ I love google. ^^
Well, she always carries her knives with her. They're small, and she can always hide them. (even when she strips, they stay hidden in her clothes)
Hmm... I don't know. Depends on whether you want to help her or capture her. Either way, someone who could fit in as a knight or soldier. Or, a dragon would fit in also. I mean, i'm going to add in a fairy. So, mythological OCs are game, too. Though, dragon or fairy might fit better. Or dragon.
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Post by soulknight18 on Apr 25, 2012 14:58:13 GMT -5
I understand, im just saying, since im giving you the chance to call all the shots, to tell me what character you would like me to be.
and as for anastasia, I ask how she might be able to because, even though Sallas is vulnerable in human form, he is still catious and....hmmm, i just got two ideas. What if say, one of the Relics he obtains falls into Anastasia's hands? OR to continue the story, what if after somehow succeeding in killing him, Tempastis' relic is passed on to her...though, the only problem with that is that The Storm usually goes after the ambitious, greedy, and prideful individuals.
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Post by Danielle on Apr 25, 2012 15:08:39 GMT -5
Okay. Well.. would you like to help her or capture her? Then, I can help you decide what character.
And.. hmm... Maybe she gets some help to kill him? Either someone without a relic who could get it. Or, someone with a relic (maybe the guy who worked at the zoo?) and, then she gets the relic by accident.
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